Want to comment on this attempt at humor in the form of a sonnet?
Once upon a time ... by CS Scotkin She looks with her big eyes pallor'd and plays a real princess, so beautiful, full of blessing of the gods with a humble spirit that few would dare deny him though. and locked his throne, a padded refuge no great discomfort while trying to escape rhythm quick'ning steps correspond to soft on its unstopable heart of your child cries, to seal his fate. resist aggression with all its major strengths and wondered how his armor would be a strong shield, girded and a round shield brilliant to protect the true princess of injustice. The king came and said to his queen, our princess does not seem to like green beans
Let me to qualify my remarks. I would be hard because you have great potential ... and that the three editors? It would be helpful if they disagree with each other. In my opinion, your meter is almost perfect. I had to fight with L3 S1 and S2. In the third stage, I was able follow the current. My Villanelle in "Pavlov's Cat" has had plenty of time for the same reason, not because it is a bad poem, but because it is Villanelle poor. If I call a "Forfarta," may be more well received. The same goes for this piece. I tried so hard to be viewed as a sonnet that I forgot to listen to the story, which is very good. The rimshot is nice, but the rest does not give us an idea a next move. You may be able to give a few clues, it is a joke on the road. As opinions go, mine is not better than most publishers, and worse than many. Take everything with a grain of salt, an ounce of Vodka ... Hic!
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